A Recipe for Fashion
A dash of fun
A sprinkle of sparkle
A pinch of sun
A snip of periwinkle
A splash of spunk
A smidge of passion
A bit of funk
A whole lot of fashion!
What do you think of this poem??
Good base.
Add how you make it...do you stir...shake...mix...blend...etc...?
Add how it's to be served...hot...cold...etc.?
My opinion: The last line ("A whole lot of fashion!") makes it sound very childish. Don't make it sound childish...
-Augustine
Reply:I like it.
Very original.
Keep the last line.
Nice work:)
Reply:great outsanding perfecto
Reply:ok
its kinda dumb
but
thats my opinion
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